This is very very raw compared to my usual slickness, vocals and all. I'm literally screaming in parts (the verses), and my voice is not used to doing that, so I'm a bit... er, off. Though I didn't slightly chorus the singy bits- I tripled them.

http://www.sendspace.com/file/tfd776

It's a songwriting demo, the tones are sucktastic, so I left everything that way. So's the playing/singing, for that matter. Like I said, raw, not slick. I want to industrialize this. I wrote it with an acoustic, recorded it drunkenly as a rock song, added vocals long after, and want to make it into a proper Snaxotrack.

Wretched creatures: get in line,
for what you seek here you will find
searching for the truth, divine;
some will see and some the sun will blind

No beauty in this world but what we make of it
we're creatures of our own creation,
just trying to get a taste of it

Forever wanting more
I've taken all I can
the tender mercies of the
already damned

You tried so hard to understand
and yet you acquiesce to their demands
but there ain't no God or master plan
just agents of the hand of man

[Pre-chorus]

[Chorus]

[Solo- Snaxie, sober]

[Pre chorus]

[Chorus x2]

[Solo- Snaxie, schnockered]

I do like the way I built up the choruses adding the harmonies.

Very nice. I dig the vocal distortion, something I have gotten fond of lately. I am jealous that you have your own voice as a singer...

I do like the chorus build up. Sounds good as rawk, and your guitar tones are great and the bass is, well .

I am excite to hear a moar industrialized version of this, but it quite good as is.

Oh your snockered solo sounds very much like my snockered solos.

I vocal effects.

And thank you thank you.

BTW, Soundtoys Decapitator = It brutalized my guitars, bass and vocals nicely. It's a channel strip plugin, and a nice one.

Quite tasty as is, would be interesting industrialed-out.

I like it. Vocal distortion is good.

THIS.

Is funky. I like the extreme grunk on the vocals in the beginning, where they almost decay into a ring modded sort of vibe.